EBOLOWA 32

By simonmiller15

Wed, 16 Mar 2016
  • 791 reads
2 comments
 

32

 

    

 

 

    

A much revised version of EBOLOWA will be on sale in book shops and online at Unbound.com.

Details to follow as and when.

many thanks meantime to readers at ABC

and good luck.

simon

 

Certificate 18
Story
EBOLOWA
Historical Fiction
Drama
Crime

Comments

Submitted by Sandy Hogarth on

Hi Simon,

It's going well.

Para One - what sort of shopping. Your reaser will think of palstic bags full of Tesco crap. Chance to show some colour - what is ticking out eg bread sticks etc.

Para 2 good and punchy

Why a 'shrewd ' mind. Need to sgow why

Good tension at end of 1st section.

Love the broken nail detail. Reminds us where she comes from

Not sure I get the Beth.. day at office.' Or is it too long since I read it.

Remainder works well

Submitted by simonmiller15 on

Thanks Sandy such great focus thanks --- such a help to get that detail and boost!