LOST IN WATER
By YaseminB
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LOST IN WATER
It begins
life as a tadpole
Uncanny resemblance to a sperm!
Therefore I wonder how much of our (my) DNA
Is shared with the humble frog.
Why am I so ebullient under water?
Donned in lycra!
I float and float.
I let the water take over my core;
My soul anchored
To the shores of the azure pool.
In the
vast oceans,
My soul ebbs and flows.
The coral reef like an iridescent womb;
Smothers the fish eggs, then the fish.
Moonbeams cast an exquisite spell on the rivers deep.
I catch my own reflection in the river and smile.
I am a woman of water.
The particles of my DNA
Of water and water alone.
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I enjoyed this very much. It
I enjoyed this very much. It beautifully captures the feelings of being in water - freedom, exuberance, and literally the fluidity that makes you feel connected to other parts of nature.
I don't feel you need either of the exclamation marks. I understand that they are part of the 'ebullience' that you describe, but I think the words speak for themselves and the exclamation marks are a bit jarring and break up the rhythm.
There's one typo: 'lycre' for 'lycra'.
Really descriptive and evocative piece of writing.
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