I couldn't ask, you wouldn't say.

Cherry

By Basket case

Sat, 28 Feb 2015
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I was wondering,
What would you care, my love?
Brilliant thoughts or beautiful body?
I have no idea,
I couldn't ask, you wouldn't say.

I was pondering,
What would you mind, my love?
Carry a temper or bring a fight?
I have no idea,
I couldn't ask, you wouldn't say.

I was waiting,
What would you do, my love?
Keep silence or disappear?
I have no idea,
I couldn't ask, you wouldn't say.

I was dying,
What would you say, my love?
Thanks god or fuck yourself?
I have no idea,
I couldn't ask, you wouldn't say.

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Comments

Submitted by Mark Say on

Prickly and painful in its emotions, but I like this for the way it conveys the harm we can do to each other through not talking.

 

Good one Basket Case.

 

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Thanks for your comment, marksmiley

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Submitted by Parson Thru on

I love the style of this. Reminds me of an old Irish call and response song.

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Submitted by Basket case on

Glad you love it, Parson Thru

I will check the song later :D

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Submitted by forest_for_ever on

I was moved by this work.  I realised as I read it, it could have been me that the voice was speaking to.  I wasn't always a great partner and caused hurt in the past. Now, work like this reminds me I should have always been more sensitive, caring and considerate.   Your poem is beautiful and thought-provoking.  Thank you.   A well deserved 'cherry pick'

 

 

Submitted by Basket case on

Thanks for your highly comment, glad you have resonate with my poem, forest

 

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