From Our Own Correspondent

Cherry

By luigi_pagano

Sun, 14 Jun 2015
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From our own correspondent
we have received this report;
there are scenes that the viewers
might find too upsetting.
If you can’t bear to see
the suffering and misery
caused by this bloody conflict,
then cover your eyes.
You’ll be spared the sight
of the dead and the dying
but the pain of those victims
who survived the carnage
won’t simply go away
because you blot out
the gruesome vision.
It won’t do to be blind
to their piteous plight.
Covering your eyes
will prolong the agony.
So let’s drop the blindfold
and witness reality.
We mustn’t be inactive
and let the wars fester.
We have to expose those
who supply money and arms
to men whose main aim
is death and destruction.
They are just as guilty
as the fanatics who fight.

© Luigi Pagano 2015

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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

This is spot on. Brilliant, Luigi!!! Great picture too.

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Cheers, Bee. It is my second attempt at IP. Can't resist the challenge. And guess what? It doesn't' rhyme!
I had the feeling that readers were getting tired of my couplets and quatrains, hence the change. Still, as long as the message comes across! 

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Bee on

One of the first thing I noticed was that it doesn't rhyme. I thought, what's going on, Luigi. But working with the subject, I think the not rhyming adds strength here, and you do keep to the rhythm. It's well done.

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I knew that your eagle eye would spot it at once, Bee. Glad that the structure worked. Thanks for the reassurance.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Art of the Diver on

That structure always works Luigi... keep in mind you listed this as a rant. I hate rants that ryhme!  smiley

Good to see you breaking out and experimenting... let the words emphasise their own beat. YeeHa... Go hard (Kia Kaha!) my friend.

Rob

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Very heartening, Rob. I don't rant very often but I do tend to write rhyming poems. The thought never crossed my mind to combine the two. I shall certainly try to 'Kia Kaha'. Thanks for the advice.

Luigi

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

very nicely done! 

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Great news. My grateful thanks for the coveted fruit.

Luigi

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

It would seem all we can do is stand by and acknowledge what happens.  You say something so important here. 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

We seem powerless to stem the tide, Helen. As you say all we can do is to acknowledge what happens but I am afraid that it would take a miracle for our voice to be heard.

Luigi

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Very thought provoking. Brilliant poem

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Thanks for your kind appreciation, Holly.

Luigi

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

It's very well done and captures the unpalatable reality of society. Look away now. And its good night from us and good night from them.

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

The perfect IP to be inspired by. Thanks for suggesting it, Ray.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by VeraClark on

yes

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I am grateful for your positive review, Bear.

Thanks, Luigi

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Liked your making of that last point particularly, Luigi. I've been pondering on something a bit similar to your main point, but not quite the same! Certainly, not looking at it all shouldn't mean pretending it isn't going on and unconcerned and unprayerful. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Exactly, Rhiannon. That was the main thrust of the poem. Withouth wanting to sound cynical, I doubt that prayer would have any effect on those heathens committing barbaric atrocities.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Masterful, Luigi, but then what does one expect from the master, himself?smiley 

Seriously though...bowled over by this one... both for the poem's conception, and for its delivery.

Tina xxx

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Flattery can get you everywhere, dear Tina, but this 'master' can only bow with humility at ABC's 'mistress' whose cherry orchard is so fruitful.
Seriously, though, your comments are always warm and generous and I thank for  them.

Love, Luigi xxx