Midpoint (IP)

By agnosticnun

Mon, 07 Jul 2014
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There is something faintly ridiculous
about middle age. It's the point when life
is no longer rehearsal, but life. Possibilities
traded for a red Corvette, or a Prius
depending on the insecurity. The audience naps.

It's good to know the lines, to have
the basics of bills and love and housing down.
And if chances were set aside
with the burden of potential, well
we all can only follow one cliche.

A child is hope, youth an audition.
Solid adulthood is a production
by chance and circumstance. But the music
of other plays lingers. The roles we practiced,
the selves that beckon offstage, all turning to this point
when desiring the escape of drama,
we can only find poetry.

 

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Submitted by jolono on

Thought this was really good agnosticnun and very well written. The first stanza really stood out for me.

 

Submitted by torscot on

I liked this little tale.

re     "...depending on the insecurity... "   I  happen to possess a    "... red Corvette... "

A  toy  plastic one with white side panels.

 

torscot

Submitted by agnosticnun on

Thanks jolono - I'm glad you enjoyed it. (Something in the poem seems a bit off to me, but I can't figure out why. But I like the first stanza too.)

Kristi

Submitted by agnosticnun on

Torscot, I like the thought of your car - it's inspired me to add a picture. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and thanks!

Kristi

Submitted by Geoff Smith on

I really like the poem, but I agree there is something missing too. How do you feel about the idea of putting 'The audience naps.' at the very end, making a two sentence final line?

I think this would create an amusing balance with 'we can find only poetry' and the final word with the end stop will leave the audience with a blank - quite literally leave them napping.

What do you think?

Thanks for reading. I am grateful for your time.

Submitted by agnosticnun on

I'm not sure. I really like the ending, though this may be a case of 'murder your darlings'... but the line does seem out of place on the first verse. I'll have to think.
 

Kristi