Spinning

By Beeme

Tue, 16 Aug 2011
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6 comments
 

What have you seen today?
Your mother wipes the same dishes
turns them over between her hands.
The indents on the china
creased like her palms.

Sometimes she can't let go.
You offer to help,
stain dish cloths and buy
her some new.
Fresh and white she admires
them like a work of art.

The fresh start of her body
moves across the kitchen.
Her hair swirls in circles
beside the dishwasher.
Spinning dirty water-
filtering to find something beautiful.

Certificate 12
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Some wonderful descriptions here Beeme, especially:- The fresh start of her body moves across the kitchen. Her hair swirls in circles beside the dishwasher. Spinning dirty water hoping to find something beautiful. Great read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Jenny, glad you enjoyed :) Beeme Xx

k.

Submitted by simonbarget on
Dish cloths? I like this except the last line which is a little clumsy. S

Submitted by Beeme on
Thanks Simon, changed the typo. Not sure about the last line, edited it slightly. Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Highhat on
Really nice Beeme- like especially "The indents on the china creased like her palms." very good metaphor ;)Pia

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
A really beautiful piece, Beeme. This had a certain starkness and honesty to it, it almost has to be whispered. Very well done! Magic xxx