war-plans

By Beeme

Sun, 13 Mar 2011
  • 2003 reads
11 comments
 

Shadows project across
the back of mountains.
Your shadows lengthens
but doesn’t fall
far from me.
Translucent light
shines like a torch,
an auburn sun-ray
searching…
a silent crowd.
Stepping one by one
onto a mirage road,
like unaware faces
on worn-out video cameras.
Sunlight curves
around the hillside
like angel's wings,
making plans for
a legion of souls.

Certificate U
Poem
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by seashore on
This is lovely Beeme - just one small point, should it be `your shadow lengthens' or `your shadows lengthen'? Really good though.

Submitted by Highhat on
another brilliant poem Beeme ;)Pia

Submitted by seashore on
PS - a typo? `Angels' for `angles'? Just come back to read it again because it's so good and spotted that! xx

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Seashore, changed both typo's. Awwh I'm really happy you enjoyed :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Pia, glad you enjoyed this so much :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by shoe on
Thought provoking, and demanding more than one read, I love these lines especially a silent crowd. Stepping one by one onto a mirage road, like unaware faces on worn-out video cameras. a poem of magnitude, much enjoyed.

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Shoe, I'm so very happy you enjoyed. Beeme xxx

k.

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Yes I also like this - really deserves to be read a couple of times as shoe says. :-)

 

Submitted by rjnewlyn on
Wonderful - the last three lines in particular. Rob

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Fatboy, really happy you enjoyed :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you greatly, Rob. So happy you enjoyed :) Beeme xx

k.