Confused extreme worlds
By Dennies C Sunny
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Take a walk through the shadows of life,
by looking a the flames in others eye,
by looking at the rights and sins in others
walk to the hills of heaven
to find the way to the gates of hell
Be an excavator
till you reach the gatekeeper
Then walk through the burning entrance
And find your way to devils side
And ask him about the disloyalty of humans.
And you find no answer.
Then you turn back
and realise that heaven is not as far as you thing
To reach there you have to cross a path
A path to the other side
Where all you see is ghostly images
where all you see is struggle to survive
where you might even get lost
Be careful of what you are looking for
rather you will be find struggling
like in the way you passed by
After crossing the path to heaven
You will find a gate
A gate with angels as guards
An entrance filled with flowers
Mindblowing fragrances and,
cupids singing everywhere to welcome you
Witnessing a different feeling
You find your way to gods side
and ask him about the disloyalty of humans
And you find no answer.
You returns back with an answer you found
You returns back with a belief that ,
even god or devil can't judge the humans
Its you who decide whether
to live in the hells circus or
to live in heavens circus
where you will be your only ringleader
where you will be your only audience
where you will be your only clown
Humans created the world they live in
its either heaven or hell
we either live in fiery inferno
or climb the hill to heavens path
we think we aren't the one who choose
but where you go depends on how you act
where you go depends on how you live
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This is a whirlwind of
This is a whirlwind of imagery, some of which is very powerful. It was a little much for me to take in all at once. Demands a few re-reads. Some ideas are repeated too - was this for emphasis?
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Your ideas suit the poetic
Your ideas suit the poetic form, this poem feels like a warning. A few grammatical things to sort, like 's in some places to show possession, a couple of typos, like a instead of at in the second line, but your wiritng is becoming very fluent.
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