SPOOKY: A Night with the Spirits

By Johnbest Obialo

Wed, 28 Feb 2018
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SPOOKY: A Night with the Spirits by Johnbest Obialo

4/5/'07
10:45pm
I returned to my duty post, after using the rest room. A small office just before entering the morgue. I tuned on my radio -listens to news at 10. My eyes strayed to the morgue, it was open, i noticed.

"something isn't right... Something seemed wrong, i thought i locked that gate?", i murmured, as i walked silently towards the morgue.

"how come it's open... How come the padlock is broken...?, is it the wind?" thoughts flooded my mind.

"what kind of wind breaks a metal padlock? Perhaps, peter saw something"

Peter is always on his post, meters away from mine. I was approaching where he was, suddenly, the power went off. I heard the scroungy sound of the generator, it was still on. "why is there no light?" fear grips me.

"Thank God i brought a torchlight", i exclaimed. Turning it on... I flashed up ahead.

It was Peters body on the ground, i ran to where he was "peter... Peter what happened...?" his body is getting cold, he couldn't answer. 

I tried to wake him up, but i saw something in front of us. It was more than anything human, more than anything I've encountered.

"it looked tall, but yet! Looks small... It gave a ghastly smile, and the face was terror". 

The front was its back, the back was its front; no where to run, just then, my torch went off.

"it's not the battery - i charged it earlier on" i notice liquid riding down my groins; 'damn it...!' It's was urine... I had never been that Scared my entire life. 

It was coming at us in the darkness. The creatures light was what i saw.

"Peter...peter stand lets run". I couldn't speak out, i could only talk in my mind. The creature made me voiceless. 

I tried to move, it paralyzed me. The creature got to where we was and made a banshees wail. 
 

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Johnbest Obialo. 

Certificate PG
Story
Short stories and flash fictions
Horror

Comments

Submitted by airyfairy on

I wanted to know what happens next!

Good idea for the setting, and the mystery of the open gate sets up the reader's expectation for something spooky to follow.  I did like the description of the front being the back and the back being the front.  

I think it would flow better with a bit of proof reading - things like some of the sentences missing capital letters at the start, or a mix up with tenses, can be a bit distracting for the reader.  In ghost or horror stories in particular, it's important to grab the reader and not let them get away.

Any chance of a second part, so we can find out what happens??

Submitted by Johnbest Obialo on

Thanks airyfairy, i appreciate your observations. 

I'll make sure to take them into consideration in the next of the story.

And yes, you heard me right... There would be a continuation.

Thanks again. 

Johnbest obialo

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

What a nightmare, sounded terifying, but I too would like to read more.

Jenny.

 

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