Two-way Love Poem

By luigi_pagano

Mon, 27 Jan 2014
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I can assure you my words are true:
I would kiss the earth on which you walk
if only you’d reward me with a smile.
I’ve tried to read your body language,
and waited for a sign for quite a while
yet you remain as ever an enigma.
My hope was that you’d reveal yourself.
Perhaps I’ll be on my own until my dotage
but I guess that being alone is not a stigma.

I guess that being alone is not a stigma;
perhaps I’ll be on my own until my dotage.
My hope was that you’d reveal yourself
yet you remain as ever an enigma.
I’ve waited for a sign for quite a while
and tried to read your body language:
if only you’d reward me with a smile
I would kiss the earth on which you walk;
I can assure you my words are true.

© Luigi Pagano 2010

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Mutevoli pensieri
Love

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Clever idea, - was that a class exercise, or just a fun idea?  Was it difficult to do? Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

It was an exercise inspired by a similar poem whose content and author I can't recall. It took a bit of thinking time to make sure that the 'mirror' version was a reflection of the first part. Thanks for reading and commenting, Rhiannon.

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

This is a good poem. It makes me wonder if this is sometimes the natural flow of our thoughts, travelling back and forwards. I like the aloneness but not wholly lonely feel of the lyrics too      Elsie
 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I like the pithiness of your analysis, Elsie. The imagery of thoughts travelling back and forward is an apt one. Unrequited love can induce the fear of having to grow old alone but aloneness is far from loneliness and it is no disgrace for someone to reach old age without companionship.

Best, Luigi