Writing Poetry

Cherry

By MistakenMagic

Thu, 02 Apr 2009
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14 comments
 

I lay you down like a page,
warm beneath the sun
of a desk lamp.

Our bodies curve into vowels
and mouths shape
soft, exotic verbs.

These fingers are quills.

Certificate 12
Poem
Conversation With My Thirteen-Year-Old Self
Love

Comments

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Brilliant! Class act! Chris XX

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Chris ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
This one did have 'cherry' written all over it, Magic. Well done! You really did produce some little gems from this week's IP. I guess that just goes to show how useful this weekly brain-teaser is:-) Tina xxx

 

Submitted by Curse of 222 on
excellent work. congrats on the cherry. jason

jason

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Tina, Nathan and Jason! I'm getting addicted to these little 30 word poems - I'll soon have an anthology ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by littleditty on
love this one - great write Magical one! :)

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thanks LD! This IP has really got my creative juices flowing ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by jennifer on
I think it really cuts us down to essentials - every word has to be so perfectly placed - a lesson for me, certainly, Miss Rambler! Magic - it's magic! Very sexy, love the 'vowels' and 'verbs' references! J x

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Jen! Yes, another kinky one ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by capoeiragem on
Economical, sensual, quite simply a great short poem. Nice work! :)

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Thank you Capoeiragem ;) Yes, I've really got a feel for short pieces now! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Can't say much more than has already been said, Magic. Like this one a lot.

 

Submitted by Dynamaso on
Can't say much more than has already been said, Magic. Like this one a lot.

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
So much that you've posted the comment twice Dynamaso ;) Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! Magic xxx