Transition

By rebus

Mon, 21 Feb 2011
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I have turned away from myself, I have turned away from what I had become.
All fueled by urges and sensations I had not known,
blinded by what I had been without.

Humans are not well built to define themselves
Humans are not well known for modesty.

It was not my decision, to confront myself, no it was hers, she decided I must look at myself and without her I did, I looked hard, for I was all I had learnt to see.

In falling I had become known to the fallen,
In knowing them I adopted their ways and developed my own.
No, it may seem that way but I don't blame them for my frailty,
I remember some of them well for without the journey they walked with me I could not look back.

But now, now I am not what I was to begin with,
nor what I became,
now I am a transition a person between people, filthy and pure, seedy and disgusted, a little jaded not quite adjusted, all that's left will flow.

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Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I think there are some really good lines in this rebus - especially this passage below. One thing - where you say "nor what I became" - I think it should be "will become" - the future tense. oh and also "all thats' left will flow" - it should be "that's" But now, now I am not what I was to begin with, nor what I became, now I am a transition a person between people, filthy and pure, seedy and disgusted, a little jaded not quite adjusted, all thats left will flow.

 

Submitted by rebus on
i see what your thinking it is undoubtedly a lack of clarity on my part, that became is a past tense, if i was to demystify this i would say that person A is looking back from stage 3 of their existence, stage 1 is not discussed, stage 2 is the what "I" became from stage one. i assume full responsibility for the lack of clarity : P also ty for the assistance with the punctuation, I never practiced spelling or punctuation as it was only ever me who needed to read what i had written, any assistance will be appreciated.