Essential Sunshine and Showers (IP)

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 15 Jun 2013
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13 comments
 

Lying, listening to the rain,
welcome, restful soft refrain.
Water falling,
filtering down and filling
spaces in the soil:
seeds soon swelling,
triggering, compelling
germination,
elongation,
tip emerging,
upwards surging,
reaching for the sun,
photosynthesis begun
– photons empower
this factory to flower,
when bathed in a regular shower.

Certificate U
Poem
Nature
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
You are such a wizz with words, Rhiannon. Wonderful;-) Tina

 

Submitted by adbates on
I wonder how this would sound if it were rapped? The words lend it to have a great rhythm. I love how you transitioned the given phrases. Genius.

 

Submitted by adbates on
I wonder how this would sound if it were rapped? The words lend it to have a great rhythm. I love how you transitioned the given phrases. Genius.

 

Submitted by VeraClark on
Brilliant..love the speed it's got.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Well, thank you all three - Tina, Adbates, and Vera, I'm so glad you liked the rhythm of this one - the idea was buzzing around in my mind after reading the inspiration point and thinking of me listening to the rain, and the seed responding to it, but I realised I must keep it brief and taut to make it interesting and snappy! regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Some wonderful use of words in this poem Rhiannon. Like everyone else has said, some great rhythm too. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
thank you, Bear and Jenny, too. I'm glad it made you smile, Bear, and that you both enjoyed the little read! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Denzella on
The little read that said so much. I envy that ability. Moya
 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Thank you, Moya! Glad it seemed appreciated by quite a number of people anyway! warm regards, Rhiannon

 

Submitted by fatboy74 on
This is a lovely little poem, no words left that should not be there. You write about nature so well.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
FB - Thank you so much. That is a lovely comment. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

HI Rhiannon

This is a lovely poem - and shows your appreciation of nature and how it works so well. It's quite clever how you can get matching words that actually make sense.

I do enjoy rain - even when its pounding down as it has been a few times this last week. But my bedroom is in a dormer, and I must admit that I wake up when I hear it - with mixed emotions - depending on whether I can sooth myself back to sleep with the noise, or if that doesn't work feel frustrated.

Jean

 

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Glad you enjoyed it again, Jean, and thanks for your comment. I usually like hearing the rain outside, when I'm feeling warm and cosy indoors! It also seems to remind me of my childhood when I liked the gurgly hot water cylinder in my bedroom! Rhiannon