After the Heat Wave
By Silver Spun Sand
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Ooh, Tina this is lovely!
Ooh, Tina this is lovely! Elsie
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Lovely overall images. This
Lovely overall images. This I found less delightfully unctuous than the rest:
"ever so slightly at the edges, and a blackbird
going home to roost, dreams of sleeping"
The italicised words seem less economical and lack a little of the confidence of the rest. Perhaps this?:
"ever so slightly at the edges, and a blackbird
homeward bound, dreams of sleeping"
Just simply my subjective opinion Tina, as usual your poetic voice is sonorous and inspiring.
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A pleasure to read, Tina.
A pleasure to read, Tina. Packed full as so often with your remembered images and metaphors. Rhiannon
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Hi Tina,
Hi Tina,
this was such a beautifully crafted poem, had such a spiritual feel to it and I too loved all the metaphors too.
Very much enjoyed and thank you for sharing.
Jenny.
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'A skylark climbs the ladder
'A skylark climbs the ladder of its song
and the wind skulks like a leopard amongst the trees' I found that so wonderfully original. Your poem captures the mood of the moment as much as describing the after heat wave conditions. Each stanza could be be a poem alone. I particularly liked (read loved) the first and last.
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