Summer Nights
By Silver Spun Sand
Mon, 29 Jul 2013
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Beneath the willow
blooms a dove-grey
peony of pigeons
huddled around
a dish of corn
on the lawn, a bee
tremulously trundles,
in ever decreasing
circles, like a child’s
clockwork toy...
the lights on my terrace –
thick with vine leaves,
come on way before
the moths perform
their nightly orbit...
in the distance
bells from a church
count down
the dimming
of the daylight
summer nights linger;
everything budding,
blooming and bursting...
time moves at a snail’s pace
as evening drips easy
from the trees, like
honey off a spoon
and I try to get used
to sleeping on
your side of the bed.
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Hi Tina, wistful poem and I
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina,
wistful poem and I loved that last stanza:-
summer nights linger;
everything budding,
blooming and bursting...
time moves at a snail's pace
as evening drips easy
from the trees, like
honey off a spoon.
what a wonderful description those last three
lines.
Ummm! deliciously dreamy.
Jenny.
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Beautiful description in
Beautiful description in every pleasing detail, and like Jenny, I found it wistful. Those last few lines were perfection.
Very much admired,
Bee.
Bee
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Seems like enjoying a
Seems like enjoying a restful, not-too-hot, not-too-cold, timeless summer evening on your terrace — oh, and being helped to notice all those things around! Thank you! Rhiannon
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The first two stanzas are
The first two stanzas are superb, the whole thing is great Tina. You set such consistently high standards; I honestly don't know how you do it. I'm in awe.
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Great poem Tina love the
Permalink Submitted by Mark Heathcote on
Great poem Tina love the opening lines. Congrats on the cherry :)
Mark Heathcote
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Hello Tina, It's hard to
Hello Tina,
It's hard to pick out a favourite line or stanza. They are all so good but the last three lines and the image of a bee tremulously trundling is one that will stay with me for a goodly while.
'On the lawn, a bee
tremulously trundles,
in ever decreasing
circles, like a child’s clockwork toy'
What drips from your imagination could be spread on a a slice of toast.
Moya
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especially liked "like honey
especially liked "like honey off a spoon" and the bells verse....beautiful alliteration throughout, Tina ...made me smile :) - alvin
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