Apocalips

By The Walrus

Tue, 23 Apr 2013

1836 reads

10 comments

Those incongruously red hills and valleys
hide a lovely yet disturbing secret.
Undulating
your moist and luscious lips become
a sculptural statement
apocalyptic,
a Dali sofa standing out
like a sore thumb in the bleak,
blinding snowfield of your wan,
delicious,
thoroughly icy skin -
a badge perhaps
to pin more brutally than necessary
to your unusually glacial heart.

Delicately reflecting a cheeky glint
of moonlight, your luscious lips
so very very red
condemn with apoplectic fury
the only righteous king to death
with unnecessary glee,
castigating, aggravating, palpitating
and frankly my dear, my only love,
my desperately beautiful honey-bunch,
with a bile more nauseating
than I've ever encountered before.

Power corrupts.

Comments

Ooh! Powerful and with a

Permalink Submitted by scratch on Tue, 2013-04-23 20:51

Ooh! Powerful and with a punch like a stiletto. I think this is the first poem of yours that I have read Walrus. I'm not fond of "luscious lips" in the second line second stanza. That phrase seems a little forced or maybe lacking a little craft, but I am quibbling a reread makes this a very good read indeed. the Dali sofa image is an inspired touch mate. Nice one.

This is pure potency. First

Permalink Submitted by VeraClark on Tue, 2013-04-23 21:00

This is pure potency. First poem I've read of yours Walrus and it has knocked me flat. The balance of words with form makes a taut, fire-spitting read. Would like to hear this read aloud.

Thanks, scratch and Vera,

Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on Tue, 2013-04-23 21:39

Thanks, scratch and Vera, I'm chuffed that you enjoyed it, and thanks eds for the cherries.

Also enjoyed it very much

Permalink Submitted by Florian on Wed, 2013-04-24 10:30

Also enjoyed it very much and curious to know who the subject is

That would be telling,

Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on Wed, 2013-04-24 11:29

That would be telling, Florian - glad you enjoyed it.

I'm seeing two subjects

Permalink Submitted by Jane Hyphen on Wed, 2013-04-24 14:00

I'm seeing two subjects behind this. Enjoyed very much.

Thanks a lot, glad you liked

Permalink Submitted by The Walrus on Wed, 2013-04-24 14:29

Thanks a lot, glad you liked it.

Walrus. It's Vera.I have

Permalink Submitted by VeraClark on Wed, 2013-04-24 20:24

Walrus. It's Vera.I have read this on repeat.Initially I assumed it to be male rape, enticement or intercourse. And now I've re-read it as simple use of facial lips and kingdom calls.The fact that I have been fannying around for the best part of days, with interpretations a ripe, I think, screams that you have written a piece beyond gold.I don't say that in my usual whimsical way either.

I just had to read this,

Permalink Submitted by Highhat on Thu, 2013-04-25 15:46

I just had to read this, first poem of yours Walrus. I'm impressed and it does bear your mark of devil may take me bravour. Hope it helped to get this luscious piece on 'paper'? Apocalips is very very good. An extremely intelligent piece of writing. Yes I'd put you in the surreal category along side Dali any day. ;)Pia