The Four Flowers (Children’s rhyme)

By well-wisher

Wed, 17 Sep 2014
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High upon a tall green hill

there grew a lonely rose

but then it met a daffodil

with golden frills that glowed.

 

And then a little thistle,

up out of the ground, did pop;

a thistle with bright bristles

of purple upon its top.

 

Then finally a shamrock grew

with four bright leaves of green

and they became best friends, it’s true,

the best there’s ever been.

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Submitted by Bee on

I loved this - especially the first two verses.

Bee

Submitted by Frances Macaula... on

I love your 1st stanza - so easy and clever.  This is a fantastic start to what would be a lovely children's poem in a picture book.  

Flowers always offer inspiration but I count three - wouldn't normally call a shamrock a flower although I suspect your metaphor for the UK.  (I believe totally lost on children.)

Personally, I would expand on the first verse which doesn't seemed forced but very natural.  I certainly wouldn't restrict myself to 4 flowers in a children's poem but like the idea of unusual (thistle) flowers... would love to see another version, Well-wisher.  Keep going!

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