and all who sail in her.

Cherry

By lenchenelf

Tue, 13 Apr 2010
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8 comments
 

I could recite, hateyouhateyouhateyou
in monotone; a strange, black, funereal

barge of words, bolted together for their
journey. Corroded hull creaks a rolling

rhythm, loose bound rage. But,
don't and sink without a trace.

Certificate PG
Poem
Doodles
Humour

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
As usual lena, you pack a punch with very few, excellently chosen words. Like it;-) Tina

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Thanks Tina, just a bit of silly :-) small edit today. All the best Lena x

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I love the idea of a barge of words Lena

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
So do I;-) Wish I could do the same with a 'bit of silly'.

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Thank you Insert, it just struck me as a fitting image for a stream of invective on a man made route :-) :-) xx Tina, you are so generous, thank you once again xx

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Just popped back to say congrats on the more than deserved cherry...even for a bit of silly;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
'I could recite, hateyouhateyouhateyou in monotone; a strange, black, funereal barge of words' - wow, really love the phrasing of those first few lines! Well done on the cherry! :) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Thank you for your warm thoughts Tina and Magic, they are very much appreciated, atb Lena xxxx