CALIFORNICATION - (aka I CAN'T WRITE CACK-HANDED)

By Hal 2104

Thu, 19 May 2016
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CALIFORNICATION - (aka I CAN'T WRITE CACK-HANDED)
 
And she takes up the space on the screen
Calmly deluding, ​invading the scene
Surprisingly easily surpassing my smile
All ass, eyes and sunshine are mine for a while
 
And she strains at the struggle to let go
​Calmly considering, how much she could swallow
​Unerringly forcibly undressing my guile
All ass, eyes and sunshine still mine for a while
 
And she fails to forget what to do
​Calmly empowering, a hullabaloo (her cellulite celluloid solution for two)
Deservingly absolvingly desolving my bile
All ass, eyes and sunshine were mine for a while.
Certificate 15
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Submitted by rosaliekempthorne on

Great use of language here, with the alliteration and rhyme (and something sort of in between), and the rhythm of the poem itself.  Things like "Deservingly absolvingly desolving" and "a hullabaloo (her cellulite celluloid solution for two)" make the writing come off the page (or rather screen) for me.

Submitted by Hal 2104 on

Thanks,  seven seasons of Californication on Netflix had to manifest itself somehow.

Forever shooting the breeze.  (Perhaps another title).

HAL 2104