lucky, luckless

By a.lesser.thing
Fri, 07 Jun 2013
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slack jawed, a
cruel tyrant, a
lover which arrives
with no love. a poker
table, the words, i am
all in.
his muscles woven
tight like a basket
and a stubborn, set
gaze that we have learned
to be nothing more, nothing
less than heartless. if you
answer what you want out of
the evening, there's a slipping
of coins and the murmuring of fabric.
we aren't
gamblers, just
meteorologists
who have crossed
the stars and states
like our t's, dotted
the i's like the certainty
of winning a prize.
call me
inhumane
but you're
a bit mundane.
eyes down
dice up
gambling
gambling
nothing to
do about luck
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Comments
Can't understand why no
Can't understand why no comments. I enjoyed this very much though I'm not very good at giving constructive comments on poems as I don't really feel qualified.
Anyway, much enjoyed.
Moya
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I missed this. Wow, glad I
I missed this. Wow, glad I caught up with it. Nicely done.
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Missed it too. The gamble
Missed it too. The gamble metaphor is such a true one - written with wit.
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really! Great twist of words
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really! Great twist of words -love a good gambling metaphor(and a simile I liked:rare - they usually ruin poems for me - but those muscles need the basket:) One to read again -
we aren't
gamblers, just
meteorologists
who have crossed
the stars and states
like our t's, dotted
the i's like the certainty
of winning a prize.
bravo :)
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