'the hot life'

By seannelson

Wed, 13 Jan 2016

4 comments

'the hot life'
will kiss your lips,
turn your head
grab your chin

burn your eyes
and shed your skin
like a bad disguise

that...

everyone buys
because we've all
already
paid that price

Permalink Submitted by Bee on Wed, 2016-01-13 08:29

Hi Sean.

I liked this so much - especially the first five lines. From there, it is based on a single (I) rhyme. I loved the brevity and meaning.

Bee

Permalink Submitted by Sim on Wed, 2016-01-13 10:35

I agree with Bee. I like the structure of the poem and the sting of the message!

Sim

Permalink Submitted by EB on Wed, 2016-01-13 13:04

Neat and sharp.

Permalink Submitted by rainingalloverthesky on Sun, 2016-01-17 10:58

Fast-paced, quirky, witty. I like it.

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