Fascination

Cherry

By Bee

Fri, 30 Oct 2015
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11 comments
 

Intent upon the light

behind her middle eye

she watched it globe and bob

until it settled

in a dip below her temple



where it flared, then paused like life

intending to be followed 

through a tunnel to a door

marked exit.



She watched it hover on another level - 

higher; great in patience,

just beyond her reach - for now,

when tantalizing in proximity, 

it inflamed a sudden passion 



in her heart to cling on till she flowered

wings to follow. Almost 

burnt, absorbed within the abstract

of a promise, she thought



the instant she learnt Latin

she'd come back to this

and write it out again, cleverer,

though no doubt, less compelling... 



But she never got to write it.

 

Certificate 12
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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Is this a daydream of relaxation? And is the Latin reference the feeling of not being able to describe in words the feelings your experiencing? Hope all is going reasonably and some good relaxation being able to be had. (sorry for convolutions of my sentence!) Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Rhiannon. 

It's musing about following that light they say you see, and about thinking you might do better, but if you wait, it's too late - the light's gone. It amused me to think you could learn Latin in a dying moment - just to improve a poem. 

Thank you for thinking. 

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

ah, a click in the end of something we intend. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Full of good intentions. Thanks CM.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for the cherries. smiley

Bee

Submitted by littleditty on

felt like a ghost story that hasnt been told yet...thought of moths too, engaging and a bit spooky, bee, cool!

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks littleditty.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

My first thought on reading this was light at the end of the tunnel - which can be taken in all sorts of ways. A glimmer of hope and some sort of decision. Lovely.

Jean

 

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Jean. I'm pleased you saw the different aspects. 

Bee

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Floaty. Ephemeral. Is this a branch away from your usual style? I am like a moth to the light and am going back to it.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for reading, LC. It's really about dying. Relaxed and finding comfort in that light. But at the end, it just goes out.

Bee