Only the Lonely

Cherry

By Bee

Thu, 10 Sep 2015
  • 2013 reads
15 comments
 

Brave lion  -

with a red and yellow mane

on fire,

you peer 

through open windows 

of my groundless house.



Shy away 

from darkness, Flower,

shadows sadden us. 

Sun wakes you;

makes you turn

and pose the day away -



worships you

and bathes with warmth, 

your hopeful face

that raises skyward 

like a tree drawn by a child

who colours life



ablaze against the blue.

A lonely child with paint 

and coloured chalks

instead of gardens,

attempts to scribble 

out the darkness -

where shadows sadden us.

Certificate U
Poem
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Do sunflowers droop in the dark? I suppose the 'groundless' house is because the flower is so tall peeping in, there is no sense of its coming from the ground? The linking of shadows to sadnesses is poignant. Sunflowers and sunshine both cheering. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

I don't know what they do in the dark, you've got me thinking there, Rhiannon, but by day they seem to follow the sun. Maybe groundless is because the narrator lives high up in a building without grounds or garden and a lonely sunflower from a stray seed has grown there tall enough to look in at the window. Glad you saw the contrasts. 

Bee

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

Beautiful description... moving...

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Terry - glad you found it so, and thanks.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Nature becomes so clear in this poem Bee, it was like you were relating a child's drawing that is bright and colourful, shutting out the shadows...as you describe at the end, that's how I percieved it anyway.

A vivid and striking...yet poingnant read of coming out of lonliness.

Jenny. x

 

Submitted by Bee on

You read it as intended.

Thanks Jenny..

Bee

Submitted by celticman on

back to basics shadows and light brings the world to the fore. 

 

Submitted by Bee on

Your comment is a poem CM. Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks for the cherries smiley

Bee

Submitted by Denzella on

Don't know about sunflowers, Bee, but you have certainly got an orchard of cherries and no one deserves them more. 

Lovely wistful poem.  Not enough of a poet to understand why.  Probably it's the loneliness theme.  Don't know. 

Moya x

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks Moya - I'm glad you got it. I don't know much about real poetry, only what I like - or don't. But your appreciation means a lot.

Hope you have a lovely day. 

X

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee

Beautfully and cleverly done, as all your work is. I love sunflowers, and always feel cheered when I see them.

Jean

 

 

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Me too Jean. Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

The  Sunflower was my daughter's favourite flower...and this beautiful poem, is up there amongst the favourites of the many favourites I have of yours.  That last stanza is superlative. For me, 'Poetry should not mean, but, simply, be'.

Tina

 

Submitted by Bee on

I love them too, Tina. They are somehow filled with promise and big cheer - like your words. I'm thrilled you liked this one. 'Poetry should not mean, but, simply, be'. - that's lovely. I'll remember that, it means you don't have to try so hard - just mean it. 

Thank you. 

X

Bee