A Fractured Verse For A Fractured Heart

By Bradene

Mon, 02 Mar 2009
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8 comments
 

It is here,
Spring;
that longed for time,
yet this year:
Nothing.

The heart lies quiet,
old,
hardly stirring,
Waxing cold.

Unloved,
feeling no joy for
hearing
birdsong at dawn;
fearing
the chore of another day
to journey alone once more.

Unneeded,
nights stretch black and bleak
in loneliness and
a day seems like a week.

Oh to experience the feeling of
Spring;
to feel the blood stir,
the heart lift, the pulses race
at the sight of a certain face
and the echo of a song
you long to sing.

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Comments

Submitted by anipani on
Poignant, I particularly liked the last verse.

anipani

Submitted by Bradene on
Thanks anipani, glad you enjoyed the poem. Val

Submitted by jennifer on
'Unneeded, nights stretch black and bleak in loneliness' Love this, it's chillingly true... I think you need different punctuation in the first stanza - a comma between 'time' and 'yet', then change the comma between 'year' and 'Nothing' to a colon. J x

 

Submitted by Bradene on
Thanks Jen, for reading and the corrections which are always most welcome. Val x (:

Submitted by jennifer on
You are so very welcome1 J x

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Val, the feeling of melancholy that you evoke with this beautifully wistful poem is overwhelming. And as Jennifer says, 'chillingly true'. A much savoured read. Thank you:-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Lovely write! Sentiment beautifully captured in the last stanza. Thank you! Chris

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
This is so beautiful Val, nice to have you back ;) 'Oh to experience the feeling of Spring; to feel the blood stir, the heart lift, the pulses race at the sight of a certain face and the echo of a song you long to sing.' The final stanza was haunting. Brilliant! Magic xxx