At sea with you
By caribou_
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I want it to happen again
I want to wade right out
Into the middle of your life
No raft, no float, no arm bands
I want to say ‘fuck it’
To go for it, not care
Dive in and down and under
But I daren't fucking dare
I want to remember the words
Your teeth sharply on the chain
You floating beneath me
I want it again
I want to take you somewhere
And lie down quietly
All heart-crashing-waves
Touching-butterfly-lightly
I want to refer to the room
At the start of a well-worn story
To be able to say ‘I saw her’
‘Now she’s my pride and glory’
To fit it all together
Tide to land and back
To deal with imperfections
Every fissure, every crack
To be that walking cliche
Say ‘fuck it’ and not care
But that other cliche - timing -
Means I dare not fucking dare.
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I love this one caribou. It's
I love this one caribou. It's great that you've put the right age rating on it, but the teaser/preview (which defaults to the first few lines unless you choose otherwise) has to be U rated as it appears on our front page. Could you please change it? To do so, just go into 'edit' and you should see how from there. Any problems do get in touch. Thanks
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The age rating was fine
The age rating was fine before - it has to be a 12 because of the swearing. It's just the 'teaser' you need to change - not the poem itself! Go into edit and look for the 'summary' - that's what needs changing so ti's U rated, not the poem itself!
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That's perfect - thank you!
That's perfect - thank you!
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This is our Poem of the Month
This is our Poem of the Month - Congratulations!
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Very, very well done.
Very, very well done.
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Hello Caribou,
Hello Caribou,
I thought this was great. The F word was effectively used. I wrote a poem shortly after joining ABC. It was terrible I have worked on it since so I might just post it The f word is mentioned more than once but I wrote it to amuse. Your's is more serious and well written. The last line is great.
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