I Saw You

Cherry

By Jane Hyphen

Sat, 22 Feb 2020
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I saw you 

And the years had washed you pale

A stranger standing 

Staring at the layered air

Nothing in your eyes

But spirits still confide

Stirring something from the past

I stopped and thought

‘Who's that?’ 

 

I saw you

Not wanting to be known

Hiding in low cloud

Still, soundless thoughts 

But there was something..

The contours of your face

Your form, familiar posture

Patterns from another age

It burned me and I knew

 

I saw you hiding

In the blankets of your clothes

Sensed the will of your eclipse

And I resolved to only breath

The forces of your presence

Know that silence, let it hang

I waited in the shadows

And with a closing sadness

I watched you disappear 

 

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Submitted by monodemo on

I liked this poem Jane. it was sad but the descriptive text in it was brilliant. 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Thanks for your lovely comment mono, sad when somebody doesn't want to connect but still richer for seeing them.

 

Submitted by celticman on

I guess we all do that. But not all of us can make it poetry. 

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi celticman, thank you for the cherries and comment.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

This sounds like a door in the eyes being shut tight. No communication in acknowledged, no communication out. So sad when that happens.

I used to feel it with my mother-in-law who had got used to not sharing with anybody in any real sense. I felt a door being slammed in my face, but she had ceased to be aware she could open up. But now she is 100 and has difficulty hearing and seeing, there is more openness, more fragility. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

Hi Rhiannon, thanks for your comment. That's interesting about your mother-in-law, it must be so hard when that happens to somebody close to you. An achievment to reach 100 though; you and your husband must be looking after her really well. 

I think sometimes people just find it too hard to deal with others and need something of a break from humanity. I don't believe you can go on  long like that though.