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By lenchenelf

Tue, 06 Sep 2011

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It is my nature to forage, pick wisps of hay
and such for those who much deserve a field
of their own.

How can I scatter the contents of my kirtled apron;
small kernels, seeded on another plain.

Gleaned in hope, each grain or strand may hold a subtle
poison, bring rise of bile, twist of heart, lasting pain.

Sight blighted with the wilt of age,
I know not what I gather.

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wonderful doodle Lena.. such

Permalink Submitted by Highhat on Tue, 2011-09-06 07:58

wonderful doodle Lena.. such a lovely image though remorseful- that's probably not the right word. I hope you know what I mean? ;)Pia

Nobody doodles, quite the

Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on Tue, 2011-09-06 08:41

Nobody doodles, quite the way you do, Lena;-) Tina xx

I wish my doodles came out

Permalink Submitted by RachelPatricia on Tue, 2011-09-06 11:49

I wish my doodles came out like this - what a beautiful opening stanza, Lena :) Rachel xx

I an going to show an

Permalink Submitted by MaggieG on Tue, 2011-09-06 14:15

I an going to show an example of what I think is a factor in very good writing. "kirtled" is a very unusual word. Though I know what it means ( I am weird like that lol ) I am also very aware that most Americans would not. Because the descriptive nature of the sentence, and stanza it is in, you make it very easy to understand its definition. Excellent ! This is a damn fine poem :)

Excellent. "...kirtled

Permalink Submitted by ScoZen on Tue, 2011-09-06 22:33

Excellent. "...kirtled apron..." I wear one in private. ps. I'm in a "Party Gown" at the moment...throw me a "Lifeline"

ScoZen

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wonderful doodle Lena.. such

Nobody doodles, quite the

I wish my doodles came out

I an going to show an

Excellent. "...kirtled

Thank you all very much,

Hi Lena. I really like this

Deceptively simple and

Hi CM...I'm scouting out

I second MistakenMagic . A

Thank you Clinton, you are

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