The Visit
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By Mr. Moon
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You hand me the bracelet without meeting my eyes -
A wordless expression that betrays the casualness between us.
It's a symbol, a sign
That you haven't forgotten.
My face burns with emotion and I quickly turn to face the sea
As decade-old feelings crash through my veins.
I open my palm to find a string of blood-red roses -
Ten bakelite buds that threaten to bloom.
The cold December wind suddenly reminds me of my present.
I know I'm breaking the rules by accepting this gift –
The red rose is an ancient symbol of intention,
Of love stronger than thorns.
But this is precisely why
I can't hand it back.
Courting the illicit, I place it on my wrist.
I am shackled.
Later that night, after you've gone,
I lie next to him in the dark and count the buds between my fingers,
Like rosary beads.
Each one a prayer to the past,
A commemoration of our communion.
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Some lovely imagery here,
Some lovely imagery here, your use of religious language, the hint of an affair, the illicit, all create a sense of passion and longing. Can't help feeling sorry for 'him'.
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yes layered and well observed
yes layered and well observed ran through with a current of strong feeling, sprinkled as mentioned with striking visual imagery, rosary beads, red roses- 'without meeting my eyes' /'wind suddenly reminds me of my present' are particularly, subtly effective, enjoyed :-)
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