Show Me The Right Path. IP

By prettyrose

Thu, 27 Oct 2011
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8 comments
 

Awakening, lying alone
On cool sheets,
You were the first thought
In my mind.

The last thought
In my now,not so closed
Eyes,When I drifted
Happily to sleep
Last Night.

You will always be
In my heart and soul
For without you
How can I seize to
Continue my selfless
Journey, you taught me,
Recently.

I do not strive to buy
The latest mobile phone,
Or current handbag from
The latest trending
Designer, or even
Worry if my shoes are
Hand cleaned once a week
By a desperate worker
On minimum wage.

No, I long for
Discombobulation to enter
My well, organized, material
Life. So I can become the
Better person I know you
Want me to be.

Thank you, I long for
The time to say that to
You in person when we meet
Like I know we will
In arms, In heaven
One joyous moment!!

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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
Hi, Julie, - I felt when I read that IP, that I would love to write something like this! But how could I show that, truly, when you know Christ, he just is your first and last thought, whoever else you have or don't have for company, enjoy or miss! So, so glad you were able to pour out your heart so honestly. Rh

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello Prettyrose, I thought this was such a beautiful well written poem, that also brought a tear to my eyes. Thankyou so much for sharing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
The teaser baffled me- typo?

Submitted by Rhiannonw on
I realised since writing my comment above, that you may have been remembering a person who has meant so much in inspiring you, and who has passed on now, rather than, as I took it referring to God himself, in the person of his Son, inspiring and helping you, and looking forward to thanking him 'in person'. Rh

 

Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Riannonw :) thank you so much for taking the time twice to comment and read my work most appreciated :) No you were right the first time. And its for all people who believe in one form of a higher belief, so you were right the first time :) Trish x

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Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Jennifer :) so good to hear from you, and thank you so much for your time and comments they meant a lot :) Trish x

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Submitted by prettyrose on
Hi Highhat :) Thank you for taking the time to comment.Always a pleasure to read any thoughts you have. And I wrote it for a tease so glad you noticed it. Keep Writing Keep Smiling :)

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Submitted by prettyrose on
Highhat, what I meant by tease, case that was took the wrong way :) I meant I wanted to mislead to thinking you all good writers, that I was meaning one thing but was leading to the real point. x

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