Haiku Five O'

Cherry

By ralph

Thu, 26 Oct 2017
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5 comments
 

Beside the wet kerb,
chips and doner meat sleep deep.
Friday fades away.

Taxis rear homewards,
the ambulance falls silent.
A dead one maybe.

A kiss for a wish
under the railway bridges.
That enough for her?

The town bells ringing
and a rain ceases to fall.
Starlight, moonlight now.

Saturday is here,
a guilty secret laid bare.
Sunday we’ll forget.

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Comments

Submitted by Ed Crane on

The nomenclature, Haiku is often misused

http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/senryu.html

 

Submitted by ralph on

Thank you. But also, if you know the rules, you are allowed to break them. This is what I always tell my creative writing students. But I take your point.

 

 

Submitted by ralph on

Thank you. But also, if you know the rules, you are allowed to break them. This is what I always tell my creative writing students. But I take your point.

 

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

But his is such a brilliant poem, I just felt it should be given its right name, but then again, Haiku 5 O is a brilliant title.... I guess Senyru 5 O sounds a bit lame

Whatever ... there are so few Haikus and Senyrus on this site, as far as I'm concerned good ones are always welcome.

 

Submitted by ralph on

Poetry is great isn't it. I know I am pushing the rules of Haiku, but the title was irrisistable.