Patterns and Ploughshares

By Rhiannonw

Sat, 07 Nov 2015
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12 comments
 

Dazzle and glare,
a rocket flare
‘Crack!’ ‘Bang!’s scare
– over there … everywhere!

Transient chrysanthemum
lighting the sky,
and serpents or spiderwebs
drawn as they fly.

Luminous candle
spews colourful smoke,
rotating wheel shoots
flames out of each spoke.

Melt guns into ploughshares,
their powder ignite
display to delight,
thrill, excite – bright
crackling patterns
of colourful light.

[IP: write something which includes three different fireworks.]

 

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Comments

Submitted by Bee on

Brilliant wordery, Rhiannon, I could see the display!

Bee

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Bee. I do like good firework displays, especially after 'Halloween' shop displays.Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Bright lights sizzling across the sky.  Lovely bonfire night poem.

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Helen. I thought it was interesing to think of better uses for gunpowder, as in 'they will beat their swords into ploughshares' in the promises about future peace. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Starfish Girl on

I like fireworks from a distance and this was just perfect.

Lindy

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Very pleased, thanks! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Ingenious take on the I.P. Rhiannon...then what else would we expect of yousmiley 

More than well done and I like the alliteration in the title.

Tina

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

That's really nice of you, Tina, thanks. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

Your poem lights up the page. Well done.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jean, that's good to know!. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

"Melt guns into ploughshares"...

If only...

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You know, Terry, thank you, I think you are the only one who has commented on that aspect, which was important to me as mirrored in an attractive use for the gunpowder! By the way, I have spent some time on your last work, but it is long, and I couldn't finish it in one sitting, so hope to return! Rhiannon