PressureHeatwave

Cherry

By Rhiannonw

Wed, 31 Aug 2016
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8 comments
 

Intense the heat,
the hurt, the pain,
repeat, repeat
again, again –
unbearable
sense of defeat.

Robot-like
keep going, sleep,
get up, work, earn
– and privately weep
with howling long
– ‘how long?’
‘how much?’
(the tears unshed)
 – ‘when will I feel again
the touch
of cooling breeze
with lightening sense
of peace and ease
from stress intense
once more?

O Lord,
support and keep me,
speedily send relief,
more strength
before I stumble,
crumble
bringing grief
on those who look to me
to persevere, provide
and guide.’

[IP: Heatwave]

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Comments

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on

What a great response to the IP Rhiannon!

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Insert. It's been on my heart for a few days, but needed trimming. Glad it came over. Rhiannon

(and thanks for cherries!)

 

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Rhiannon

This is a truely remarkable poem. You made the reader feel the heat.

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thank you, Jean. A mixture of observation of some going through particular pressures, and reading the cries and struggles, prayers and persevering faith recorded in the Psalms also. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

You made us wait for this gem of a poem, Rhiannon, but the wait was worth.

Luigi x

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, thank you, Luigi, glad you found it so. It mulled around for a while on my heart, but not quite right. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Rhiannon,

so much of this poem spoke to me and I could feel the intense struggle.

Very well writtten and congrats on the cherries.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Thanks, Jenny. I'm glad it spoke to you. Thanks for letting me know. Rhiannon