Dealt

By Shannan

Sun, 30 Nov 2014
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Dealt

 

Life created the cards.

One pack.

Two colours:

Blood red, of life and love,

And black, the cross,

The mark of death,

Some say hate,

A twisted fate.

 

The colours are worn

In four symbolic suits.

The red heart

Overflowing with potential

So full of love.

The diamond that shines,

Made for beauty,

Ready for good.

The noisy club,

As it bashes and kills,

To bury life

In the soil

Dug out with the spade.

 

The cards are shuffled,

The deck is dealt,

The baby made;

Birthed into the world: By life for death,

After playing with the dealings

Of love and hate.

 

A teacher will offer hope,

A dealer will pawn addictions,

And the babe will choose:

One path towards its fate.

 

Or is the game rigged?

Is there a predetermined destiny?

Was the path already dealt

Before the baby even felt?

 

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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Much food for thought, here Shannan, in your philosophical journey through life.  Some effective imagery at work here.

Tina

 

Submitted by Shannan on

Yes ma'am ... far too much food for my thought in my opinion... been struggling with the questions for awhile with regards to the predetermination of our paths ... one such set of questions in a blog ... http://novel1eishlondon.wordpress.com/2014/09/27/part-4-the-trouble-with...

So many thoughts and such is the mystery of life ;-)

Trust you are well and that your poem on the bird in the cage willl grace your page again.

Keep well $

 

Submitted by Syphon on

I like this clever piece of thought provoking writing Shannan. Well done. 

Submitted by Shannan on

Thanks Syphon, wonderful to receive such feedback. Thank-you $

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Really like your idea of life as a pack of cards. 

Submitted by Shannan on

There are so many metaphors and analogies all around us, it all depends on how we perceive them.

Have a great afternoon $

 

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

The suits and symbols in the pack of cards are ancient. You breathe new life into them.

Submitted by Shannan on

Thank-you.

 

Submitted by Bee on

I like the way you have explored the various possibilities and found the comparisons original. Made me think, too. 

Enjoyed.

Bee

Submitted by Shannan on

Always lovely to read you, thanks so much for the comment and compliments. Yay for thinking, can't have that grey matter getting too unfit ;-)

Keep well $