EDENRIVER. VALLEY
By sharronrosa7
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It was a hot sunny day in August Susanne Hamilton was driving across the Rochester bridge over the river,as she looked through the window she noticed the suns rays that seem to be dancing on the top of the water!
"Oh look at that",pipped up her young stepdaughter,from the back seat. Ashleyrose had been staring out of the window for the last 5 miles. Susanne smiled,"so you have noticed the sparkle on the water too"! "Its beautiful",Ashley replied.
Lilian the eldest daughter,who had been dozing,stirred at the sound of her,sisters voice. "Oh we're almost home", she murmured.
They had come from the after collecting ashley ,she had spent the week-end in France. She had been staying with
"What do you want for a quick dinner ,soup or shall l heat up the rest of the spaghetti in the fridge", Susanne questioned'as she drove into their road,
Spaghetti from the fridge both girls chorused, laughing together! Susanne laugh also as she parked the car and both girls scrambled out and went into the house still laughing.
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Hi, welcome to ABC Tales.
Hi, welcome to ABC Tales.
You've given the reader lots of questions to think about in this first part - the mysterious aunt and the accident. Just needs a bit of proof reading - a couple of capital letters missing and the quotation marks for the last line of dialogue.
I hope you'll enjoy your time on ABC Tales.
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