Bluewater Paradise...
By Silver Spun Sand
Thu, 28 Jan 2010
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A woman pushes a shopping trolley;
a man, over a coffee, peruses the paper.
In a cyber-cafe, crowds are mesmerised
by the screens of computers.
A vagrant’s told to leave with nowhere to go
after falling asleep at his table.
A baby in a buggy screams his lungs out;
his mother makes love to her mobile phone.
Thomas Cook is bursting at the seams –
bulging with brochures, magazines...
I’m in two minds whether to buy that dress.
Outside – it’s raining cats and dogs.
Might go back to M & S and try it on.
A tramp moves on through an automatic door.
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I think this is very
I think this is very powerful poem, Tina. I love the trail of thoughts at the end in stark contrast with reality.
These lines were especially effective for me, "A baby in a buggy screams his lungs out; his mother makes love to her mobile phone." and also sadly very true.
Another great poem ;-)
Beeme xx
k.
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Personally, I preferred the
Personally, I preferred the lines:
"A vagrant's told to leave with nowhere to go"
So simple yet so powerful. This is another pearl in your collection, Tina.
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I love the simple yet
I love the simple yet effective contrast in the final stanza, the tramp with nowhere to go while you decide wether or not to get (another) new dress.
Loved it xx
P.S. Go get the dress but buy a copy of the Big Issue on the way.
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No 'e' on Thomas Cook! I
No 'e' on Thomas Cook!
I like this but I think the Punters make their choice verse spoils it - it becomes moralising rather than observational.
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A brilliant look at everyday
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A brilliant look at everyday life, Tina! There's so much beauty in the truth of this poem ;)
Magic xxx
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I do think that improves it
I do think that improves it - thankyou for listening!
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A woman pushes a shopping
A woman pushes a shopping trolley;
a man, over a coffee, peruses the paper.
I particularly like these lines. I love the way you write x
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