Sunshine & showers (I.P.)

By Kahdai

Fri, 16 Jul 2010
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The sun came out in June
i saw you in that garage
saw the sun like you too
made my mind up therthen

The first sunset, I found
my way into your arms, by
the end of the night- out
and you came back to mine

The first rain I made for
the truth you pulled from
deep inside I almost lost
and therin you I realised

The whirl wind way we try
be together all the time
was on the train meet me
at the station always did

More rain came as it does
here of all land expected
you were first my comfort
after all was washed away

Then started your storms
always didnt know how to
stop them how i cause it
to storm around so rough

One storm took me in wind
tore me into the sky away
starting back to you soon
as it might calmed enough

I fear one storm could be
big enough to take me out
to sea exhusted, hopless,
despair or drift us apart

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Submitted by Beeme on
Hi Kandai, this is very moving. I think you use the weather and storm to a much better effect than I. Pathetic Fallacy is using the weather to reflect emotions and the feelings of a character, I reckon this is what we both use in our poems about storms :). I really enjoyed. Beeme xx

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Submitted by Kahdai on
Thanks Beeme! I still think yours better though! True I sure feel stormy some days! Yet some days stormy can be a good feeling for me. Anyway am very glad you like it! (psst is kaHdai btw ;)) xx

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