Like Migratory Birds

By JoseHdz
Thu, 03 Mar 2011
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15 comments
I opened my eyes and
Saw that you had
Left. I glanced to
The right
And saw the impression
Left on
The bedspread. As far as
Goodbyes go
This one barely
Qualifies. A simple
Hug could have
Made all the difference.
Like autumn
Leaves we fell
From the branch
And landed in different
Realms. I know
That eventually we will
Have time to reflect
On the moments
We touched,
And whispered hello.
But for now
We must separate
And go our own ways;
Like migratory birds.
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Comments
Again, the elegant
Again, the elegant simplicity of your style proves to be much greater a sum than the parts would otherwise indicate.
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Hi JoseHdz, this is so
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Hi JoseHdz,
this is so beautiful, very expressive.
Jenny.
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Jose. Agree with Jennifer
Jose.
Agree with Jennifer
"..this is so beautiful, very expressive..."
ScoZen
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beautifully put together
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beautifully put together jose
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'Elegant simplicity' - I
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
'Elegant simplicity' - I think that fits your writing so well, Jose. I nearly missed this one, and I'm real glad I didn't;-)
Tina
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I really enjoyed this, very
I really enjoyed this, very beautiful :)
I love these lines;
'On the moments
We touched,
And whispered hello.'
Beeme xx
k.
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A lovely poem Jose, congrats
A lovely poem Jose, congrats on the cherry. :-)
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Love the deceptively simple
Love the deceptively simple quality of your writing, Jose. This is another gem.
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