Talking about a revolution

Cherry

By Highhat

Sat, 10 Sep 2011
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22 comments
 

Chiselled in granite
no cracks on the surface
not a single cavity within the frame
this is not a clouded state
of confusion
and decay
but an archetype
of wisdom
hurled 1000 light years
into the future
where we dare not tread
we images of insanity
reaching out to feel
bonds and resistance
the freedom we know
is limited
by losing our words
and in the rising of the poisonous
bile
only the young shall be released

Certificate U
Poem
Other Fiction

Comments

Submitted by MaggieG on
As an American , this makes me think of the Martin Luther King statue that was just erected. So far , but in some ways not so far. Much enjoyed this :)

Submitted by Highhat on
It's supposed to be a perfect body and mind and spirit of which there aren't many on this goddam earth at the moment. OOps Sorry But thanks for reading and commenting Maggie- ;)Pia

Submitted by MaggieG on
No apologies necessary .... ;) and I thoroughly agree :)

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
A 'strong' write, Pia. Best of luck in the competition;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
I suppose it is a bit spicy- he he Thanks Tina-- ;)Pia

Submitted by Word Reiver on
I like this a lot. Before I read your explanation, this made me think of our ancestors sending themselves into the future through us, their unblemished children. I like the powerful style you use. it's adamant.

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Love the title, Pia. As Tina says, a very strong piece. All the best with the competition! Magic xxx

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello Pia, there's quite a lot of truth in what you have written here. When we come into the world, we are perfect, but the moment we are born, the long journey of being a human and all its tragedies and consequences begins. This was how I read your poem, hope that it was right what I read. I wish you all the luck in the world with the competition. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Hi Word Reiver- that is a very nice interpretation. I'm glad you could get so much from this and thank you for your comment. ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Hi Magic- thanks a lot- glad you liked it and thank you for the good wishes ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Hi Jenny yes the young are still pretty unspoiled I think. And we haven't made a fantastic world for them to inherit, have we? So much trouble and strife. But you did get it spot on. Thank you for reading and leaving such a good comment and thank you for the good wishes. I hope you can see your way to an entry. I'm sure you could come up with something good. ;)Pia

Submitted by Cavalcader on
New HighHat Good poem freedom very strong words. And true! in lots of ways you have written. All the best in the comp; Pia, I have just learn't new word reiver=to be deprived, was going to ask, not much up on some words. Thanks. julie xx

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Julie

Submitted by cormacru999 on
a good 'power' piece. I liked it very much.

Nicholas Schoonbeck

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Cormacru-glad you liked it. ;)Pia

Submitted by Overthetop1 on
I had to read this several times-but think I got it. It's very powerful and enigmatic. You know your writing just gets better and better Pia. Good luck in the comp. I won't be enerting. Firstly, I have the dreaded writers block. Secondly, I find the whole cherry thing stressful enough without worrying about competitions. But then that's just me!

Overthetop1

Submitted by Highhat on
Poor OTT- I feel for you. Thank you for your good wishes and your fine comment ;)Pia

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks for reading Julie- have a good week ;)Pia

Submitted by Beeme on
I agree with all that's been said. A fantastic tribute and fabulous piece of writing. Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Beeme. ;)Pia

Submitted by seannelson on
I like this quite a bit. It comes at a fitting time here in America with the "occupy wall street" movement, not to politicize the poetry thread.
"If I send you post-cards from the side of the road: photographs of movies, and hearts about to implode"  -  Elliott Smith

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Sean- I think it is great to politicize this- that's it- however you want to do it- just do it! ;)Pia