Loss

By magicdarer

Wed, 29 Aug 2012
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Gain something
Go on just do it
Gain something
And I swear you will lose something

Gain a penny
Become less poor
Gain a wife
lose your freedom

Gain your freedom
You lose your cell
Gain food
Lose your hunger

Gain company
Lose your loneliness
Gain weight
Lose your old trousers

Gain a thousand pounds
Lose your penny pinching
Gain a billion pounds
Lose a few days sleep

If your dreams come true
You lose the dreams you had
If your dreams come true
You could even end up sad

Certificate U
Poem
Autobiography

Comments

Submitted by denni1 on
I thought this was quite sad, but really unusual and clever. Fat. Married. Skint. In prison. That's what l got out of it xx

 

Submitted by hoalarg1 on
interesting poem MD. Typo for 'loose', needs to be 'lose'. Clever poem.

 

Submitted by celticman on
I'm tryig to think of exceptions. Gain a child, lose sleep. Lose a child, lose sleep. I really like this. Not sure about the cause and effect, but what the hell, gain a poem, lose what?

 

Submitted by celticman on
lets reverse that then. lose ink, lose a poem? lose ignorance, lose a poem? It's a neat way of thinking though.