Continual Torment

By skinner_jennifer

Sun, 11 Nov 2012
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A hundred years
filled these old walls,
deserted rooms mock as
negligence rears its ugly head,
feelings of deprivation stagnate
in the recess by an open fire place,

receptive minds process what little evidence
exists...recoiling from the impressions, memories
squeezed through crevices, crippling the foundations
like a thief in the night...or a plague of rats infiltrating,

lifetimes stare now at this barren existence, for there is no
freedom here only regrets, a repertoire of shadowed mistakes,
never empty always replenished, leaving ghosts with suppression,
unable to move on to the next part of their spiritual enlightened journey.

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Comments

Submitted by Highhat on
Wow Jenny- this is a very powerful poem. Such gloom and doom. I have a feeling it may be a stream of consciousness one as it is very gloomy for you. Not like your usual stuff but filled with all sorts of brilliantly desperate images. Hope you are well after this outburst! ;)Pia

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Something really different from you, as Pia says, Jenny, and a big 'well done' from me;-) If admire the second stanza, especially;- "receptive minds process what little evidence exists...recoiling from the impressions, memories squeezed through crevices, crippling the foundations like a thief in the night...or a plague of rats infiltrating," And speaking of rats as you were here, I have just been looking at some big, fat, brown country rats polishing off the remains of the bird seed underneath my willow tree. Not good, so I shall have to see about clearing them. Anyway, really enjoyed your poem;-) Tina

 

Submitted by jolono on
Great words Jenny and so very well constructed.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, I'm so sorry I've taken so long to thankyou for your comment. There's been so much going on at home. Anyway yes you are right, it was just a stream of thoughts about spirits in an old haunted building. But thankyou for reading and glad you enjoyed. Wishing you well. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina, again so sorry I've taken so long to reply to your comment, it's been so hectic here. I'm so grateful to you for reading and really appreciate you commenting. By the way, hope you've managed to get rid of the rats, I know what it's like. We had a rat came up through our drain, it was eating the bird food, but that was last year and we haven't seen it since, hope we never do either. Hope you manage to get rid of yours too. Thankyou for reading and taking the time to leave a comment. Wishing you well. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi jolono, thankyou so much for stopping by and reading, it's greatly appreciated. Glad you found it well constructed. Hope you are well. Jenny.

 

Submitted by moonphish on
lovely in its darkness....love the way it is constructed...like you were walking down a staircase into a haunted basement :) - alvin

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there alvin, sorry I'm a bit late to your comment. I'm so pleased you could get a picture from this poem. I'm so grateful to you for letting me know. Peace. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hello bear, you know you could be right about there being more to this poem than a haunted house, but I actually had a haunted house in mind, although I was listening to a gothic symphony while writing, so I imagine there were many elements to this poem. I'm grateful to you for reading and really appreciate you letting me know. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Hi Jenn had to come back to this one-felt I had gone over it too lightly first off. I think it is amazing that you could construct the lines as you did and it still came out so poetically. There is definitely that ghostly feeling about it. Haunted house with ghosts that can't move on. A very clever observation- such desparate lives that lived in this house. So well described. Just thought I would tell you how much I enjoyed it- yet again. ;)Pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, thankyou for coming back to this poem and I'm so pleased you let me know that you understood more about where I was coming from within this poem. Really appreciate your words. Jenny.