Night Moves...

Cherry

By Silver Spun Sand

Mon, 01 Jun 2015
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14 comments
 
Somewhere – far off 
a lovers’ knot is tied;
 
a pair of Tawny Owls, 
towitt...towoo; closer, 
closer yet.
 
Wind shifts
a thicket of reeds
through a melange of mist...
 
croons the creek
to the soft-shoe shuffle
of a suddenness of stars...
 
out of nowhere –
(one who perfects the art
of this, here, now...
of stillness – absolute) 
stalks the heron.
 
Closer, closer still
a Tawny, as within
the tangled scrim
a branch snaps
 
and eyes – orbs,
a lethal mix of ambergris
and antonyms
reflect – 
 
become the moon...only
its darkling side
 
as darts, in vain,
the Vole
as does the Mouse..
to no avail
 
as 
lifts
the Heron –
legs trailing
 
head – black crowned
white streaked –
orange beaked...
a Golden Orfe
its booty
 
chasing a sun-sated sky’s
exorbitant beauty.
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Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

packed to bursting with metaphor and detail of stealthy activity of dusk! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

'Stealthy activity of dusk'...I like that, Rhiannon, a lotsmiley  Tina

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

Really good imagery. Love the twists and flow of the poem to match the flight of the hunters.

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Great feedback, indeed, Ae.  'Twists and flow...to match the flight of the hunters'.  Brilliantly put.

Tina

 

Submitted by torscot on

Delightful read this one

You get a real sense of silence in the words, very atmospheric I thought, and I do like the photo.

regards

torscot

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks, torscot...and for noticing the picture...but then, you wouldsmiley

Hope life is on an even keel for you.

All best wishes

Sand Lady

 

Submitted by catherine poarch on

What a rich poem, full of unexpected words. You caught the suddent movement of things.

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Indebted to you, catherine.  Your words, as ever, sum it all up, to a 'T'

Tina

 

Submitted by EB on

Says so much in so few carefully chosen words. 'become the moon...only
its darkling side'. I like that. 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

So pleased you noticed that, EB.   Means  a lot.  Thank yousmiley

Tina

 

Submitted by maisie on

I enjoyed this one too, it certainly built up towards the end.  There is a charity online looking for owl poems...    i submitted some earlier this year if you're interested.

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Well hello there, Maisie.  It made my day to hear from you, and if you've any more info you'd like to share about that owl thing, I'd be more than keen to hear about it, and maybe others would too.

Hope life is treating you kindly lately.  If it isn't, just let me know, and I'll do my best to 'duff it up'...but only in the gentlest of ways, of coursesmiley

Warm regards.

Tina

 

Submitted by maisie on

http://owlmoon.org/

however the end date was may 15th.   so you could ask... :) it never hurts

a good place to look at now and then...

https://www.facebook.com/poetrycontestsforacause

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Thanks for that, maisie.  Much appreciatedsmiley  Tina