Charlie and Eliza (Pt 1)

this is great. Charlie and Eliza are so sweet and believeable. 

I really like all the detail in this and also think the two main characters are shaping up nicely

A couple of suggestions:

The dialogue as they walk around the town - it's a bit block of text followed by block of text and I'm not sure how authentic that sounds - I know there's lots of information needed in this introduction, but perhaps you could break it up a bit?

If she's only been in England for a month, I'm not sure her english would be as good as you have it being - especially her spoken english

Hope that helps. Lovely to see you back on the site, and I am looking forward to the next part!

Pretty piece, tight writing and lots of nice detail throughout (peeling the orange/Christmas fruit talk during the walk)

* You've (briefly) switched to present tense during the extended conversation - 'Eliza smiles / I shrug'

Very enjoyable read, onto the next part