SPACE

Cherry

By Bee

Mon, 06 Jan 2014
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13 comments
 

Look, the tempest rages. 

Thunderous, the heavens threaten

endless lashes to the tender

flesh of life.

 

The ocean's swell throws up above great walls

to manifest its might whilst we 

with little hands plaster 

sand against the heaving tides. 

 

We cry with soundless voices at the winds

to quit, but still they plunder

cliffs to tumble. Mountains rip their breasts 

asunder and sinkholes open gaping throats 

to swallow hope, uprooted trees

and drowned crop fields - the earth imploding -

giving up the fight.

 

 

Certificate 12
Poem
Nature

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

You have caught the awesomeness of such forces, and our own smallness. How we appreciate the quiet when they stop!
line 4 – you do mean 'if' not 'of', do you?
Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Bee on

Hi Rhiannon. 

Yes, I was being shoddy as usual. So glad you liked it, though.

Thank you,

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

 

Bee

Submitted by Parson Thru on

Lovely stuff, Bee.  Happening outside here right now.  Good luck.

Parson Thru

Submitted by Bee on

Thanks, Kevin.

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

Definitely captured the nature and power of the elements.  Well done Bee.

 

Submitted by Bee on

I was so happy to get that comment from you. Thank you scratch.

Bee

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

Hi Bee,

this was such a dramatic poem...it made me think of the waves crashing over the walls at sea fronts.

Your descriptions captured everything about the weather we've been having.

Well done and much enjoyed reading.

Hope you are well.

Jenny.

 

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you so much, Jenny, for your lovely words. I am well, thank you, and I hope you are, too.

Bee

Submitted by jeand on

Hi Bee,

Another beautifully written poem. I particularly liked "endless lashes to the tender flesh of life."

 

Jean

Jean Day

Submitted by Bee on

Thank you, Jean. I'm pleased you picked that line, and that you liked the poem.

Bee

Submitted by Bee on

Just saw the cherries! Thank you.

Bee

Submitted by scratch on

Excellent, cherries!