Unfinished (2)

By Beeme

Mon, 22 Mar 2010
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14 comments
 

Another innocent man is
turning in an early grave.

You're playing tennis with
racism branding one insult
acceptable, just a laugh.

What can the earth see?
The heaven of starry skies above
or the broken land around her.
Cracks resurfacing.

It's all the same just different.
A new age, better paid.
Not much respect, find a better
resting place.

Certificate U
Poem
Miscellaneous

Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An interesting one, this, Beeme. I wonder where it will lead;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by rjnewlyn on
Seems finished enough to me - if that's what you meant by 'unfinished'. It's not for everyone but this is actually the poetry I like best - images that stick in your mind and yet slip out of your grasp when you try to pin them down. Like trying to make sense of a dream. Like most of TS Eliot (to me). I enjoyed this very much - even more than the space-fishing of part 1 (if they're supposed to be parts 1 and 2).

 

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I agree with Rob - this seems very finished, Beeme! I especially love the assonance of that final stanza which is the perfect finish ;) Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Tina, I'm glad you enjoyed and so do I :-) Beeme xx

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Submitted by Beeme on
Yes this is part 2 of 'Unfinished' Rob, I'm glad you enjoyed and thankyou for leaving such a thoughtful comment. I'm pleased you like the images, they are meant to be somewhat surreal :-) Beeme xx

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Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Magic I'm glad this seems finished to you and Rob ;-) I'm especially pleased you like the final stanza as I wasn't sure it worked. Beeme xx

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Submitted by Nolan on
Interesting
 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thanks Nolan =] Beeme xx

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Submitted by Nolan on
What's this =] ? Can't make it out take off my glasses get right up close to the screen it's all dots and blurry. I'll have to get better resolution. Well I'm sure it's not an insult. Not so familiar with modern English! (Could you explain also lol ? And :] what’s that? Is there a dictionary? I’m pushing fifty.) Nolan &&
 

Submitted by Beeme on
Its a smiley face Nolan as is :]. lol is a slang word meaning to laugh out loud! Hope that helps. Beeme xx

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Submitted by Tom Brown on
Lots of love!
 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme Yes I agree same as other's really good images,and stanzas,and true of life. Laugh out loud great.Image mark. Just done one on Oh! Wheelie Bin (True) from pavemnet. gone missing. Comments I have asked and any happenings to other's. they are coming in.You could Beeme make one up go on!and post on here. julie xx

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you Juile, I'm glad you enjoyed :-)

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Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou Nathan! Beeme xx

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