Unfinished (2)
By Beeme
Mon, 22 Mar 2010
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Another innocent man is
turning in an early grave.
You're playing tennis with
racism branding one insult
acceptable, just a laugh.
What can the earth see?
The heaven of starry skies above
or the broken land around her.
Cracks resurfacing.
It's all the same just different.
A new age, better paid.
Not much respect, find a better
resting place.
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An interesting one, this,
Permalink Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An interesting one, this, Beeme. I wonder where it will lead;-)
Tina xx
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Seems finished enough to me
Seems finished enough to me - if that's what you meant by 'unfinished'. It's not for everyone but this is actually the poetry I like best - images that stick in your mind and yet slip out of your grasp when you try to pin them down. Like trying to make sense of a dream. Like most of TS Eliot (to me). I enjoyed this very much - even more than the space-fishing of part 1 (if they're supposed to be parts 1 and 2).
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I agree with Rob - this
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
I agree with Rob - this seems very finished, Beeme! I especially love the assonance of that final stanza which is the perfect finish ;)
Magic xxx
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What's this =] ? Can't make
What's this =] ? Can't make it out take off my glasses get right up close to the screen it's all dots and blurry. I'll have to get better resolution. Well I'm sure it's not an insult. Not so familiar with modern English!
(Could you explain also lol ? And :] what’s that? Is there a dictionary? I’m pushing fifty.)
Nolan &&
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new Beeme Yes I agree same
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Beeme
Yes I agree same as other's really good
images,and stanzas,and true of life.
Laugh out loud great.Image mark.
Just done one on Oh! Wheelie Bin (True)
from pavemnet. gone missing.
Comments I have asked and any happenings
to other's. they are coming in.You could
Beeme make one up go on!and post on here.
julie xx
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