They Haven't Loved

Cherry

By JoseHdz

Fri, 15 Jul 2011
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11 comments
 

I can’t stand when
People say
Mature love
Is beyond jealousy
And full of trust--

They haven’t loved.

I want you
To yearn for my
Every thought
And howl at
My silent poems.

I want you to feel
Me in your
Inner thighs
And ache for
My outer mind.

Let me fall
And roll onto
Your vast sky--

Like a
Fluid pen
To the flesh
Of a warm
Sheet of paper.

I want you
To be the
Exclamation mark
At the end
Of my wordless poems.

Certificate U
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by celticman on
First thought. Like it, but am a bit unsure about Vast sky.

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
Thanks, Celtic~! I did add 'onto' instead of 'on'... 'vast sky' was the first line i could think of. i think when taking into account the 'fall' and 'roll' it adds a surreal quality to the poem that i rather like.. if i think of something better i will consider editing it.. thanks again, cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by Beeme on
I definitely like it Jose, powerful and full of meaning with lovely imagery. Beeme xx

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Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you, Beeme :) very pleased you enjoyed this piece and found it powerful/lovely... cheers, jose hernandez diaz.

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
I really like it too

 

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
I too love the imagery in this one, Jose. Well done on the cherry;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
It just rolls over you this one Jose. ;)Pia

Submitted by L G Meadows on
I loved the imagery on this, it is powerful.

 

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new JoseHDZ Really good,romance, fluid pen and last stanza great. I want you To be the Exclamation mark At the end Of my worthless poem So powerful the way word's roll. congrats; on the cherry! cavalcaderl julie

Submitted by shoe on
Excellent poem!

 

Submitted by JoseHdz on
thank you all for the warm feedback. glad you all seemed to like it :) cheers, jose hernandez diaz.