An Unexpected Result

By luigi_pagano

Sat, 22 Aug 2015
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He was exceptionally bright and brainy
but he had a physique that was puny;
perhaps he was too small to consider
accepting a place from some Uni.

He’d a string of straight As at A level;
(best results of his school’s sixth form)
good enough to satisfy requirements,
well above and beyond the norm.

He ummed and ahed and finally agreed
he would opt for Cambridge or Oxford
and with the help of a big scholarship
it was something he could easily afford.

So he packed and went on his way
to embark on an adventurous long trip.
Due to his minuscule anatomical frame
the bullies thought that he was a drip.

It was his ambition that one fine day
he would wear a mortar and gown,
then knocked out five of those goons
and he was disgracefully sent down.

© Luigi Pagano 2015

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Comments

Submitted by loquaciousicity on

Interesting dénouement... fate can be a bi*ch

Nice poem, though!!!

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

You have hit the nail on the head, Terry. Fate can indeed be a bitch.
So glad you liked the tone of the poem.

Best, Luigi

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Oh, the ending was such a disappoinment! I think I was wanting him to succeed, with his small frame, and get the better of the bullies in some clever way! Clever rhyming scheme again, and an enjoyable read. Rhiannon

 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

I can understand your disappointment, Rhiannon, but in works of fiction, as in real life, happy endings don't occur every time.
I was confronted by a dilemma on how to conclude the poem and then I realised that the verse posed some  interesting questions: although the weaker man prevailed physically over his tormentors, was it the right action to take? It didn't resolve the situation as he won the battle but lost the war. And secondly, was justice served by his expulsion?
Discuss and debate.

Luigi x

 

 

Submitted by Deliberately Ev... on

This has a nice comedic rhythm and tone to it. 

The beat of your heart is the mellifluent rhythm to my soul.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

It has, as you say, a humorous tone but it also contain a hidden message, AE. See my reply to Rhiannon.
Thanks for reading and commenting. Very much appreciated.

Luigi x

 

 

Submitted by Bee on

I was disappointed, too - but it was an unexpected result in a twist that came right at the end and worked well. 

Bee

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

It was an unexpected result, Bee, although the warning that 'for every action there is an equal and opposite reaction' was not heeded and should have been anticipated.
I would not be too disappointed by how it ended; the young man is full of ability and will no dout bounce back.
How do I know? You have the author's word.

Luigi wink

 

 

Submitted by airyfairy on

I really liked this.  The best laid plans, and so forth.  And interesting dilemmas as outlined in your answer to Rhiannon.  I would say he'll be OK as long as he regards it as a lesson learned and not an opportunity lost. 

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

That is exactly my view, airyfairy and you have illustrated the point perfectly. Thank you.