Zest (IP)

Cherry

By paborama

Fri, 27 Sep 2013
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9 comments
 

Always it started the same way
Blame begat blame begat blame
"Call a spade a spade," she'd spit,
Deal a blow did he.

Everything seemed fine a few days hence
Forgiven and forgotten
Gay flowers with scent so free

Holding back before the children
Injuries hidden from the neighbours
Joshing with her mum

Keeping it in before Saturday night
Love hidden from her memory
Mumming for his mates

November came, November went
On and on she nagged/he bragged

Please don't hurt the children
Quietly work away your shame.

Realising the sorry mess for what it was
Sought they help but found it wanting
Terrible the wanting

Unravelling. What once was so very free
Voices unrecognized by agencies
Without teeth.

'X' went from the post-its on the 'fridge.
Youth of long-departed gone from memory
Zest gone. Only bitter pith remains.

Certificate PG
Poem
Two sets of Facts to Fit One Hypothesis
Inspiration Point (work that responds to our weekly writing cue)

Comments

Submitted by Linda Wigzell Cress on

A hard-hitting and touching piece.  Great take on the IP.

Linda

Submitted by paborama on

Thanks Linda. The gauntlet could not go unchallenged...

Submitted by Ray Schaufeld on

Sharp, sour, sad. A very good response to the IP    Elsie

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on

Great one for the IP.  Emotive and thought-provoking.

Have a sunny Sunday;-)

Tina

 

Submitted by paborama on

Thanks, Tina.

Submitted by VeraClark on

Direct and emotive, paborama. Good crafting.

 

Submitted by iDrew on

Another great IP piece.  Well written.

 

xDrew

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Submitted by paborama on

Thanks both.

Submitted by luigi_pagano on

Excellent take on the IP. Well crafted and deep.