Our Este Angel

By Richard L. Provencher

Fri, 13 May 2011
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Angels from early days
of my schooling
meant little cherubs

fiddling bows
and smiling with cherry
cheeks and chubby

hips while floating
among marshmallow
clouds in disarray--

our modern angel
dear daughter
wears her
tagged jeans
and hairdo with popular
wild colours

simply a precious
young lady

wishes to be a darling
for mom and dad
innocent to life’s pitfalls

yet bathed in love.

© Richard L. Provencher
Website: www.wsprog.com/rp/

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Comments

Submitted by maisie on
the 'but' jars the poem, makes the line too long, and adds a sensation you might not want, heres a suggestion: try it with it out -

maisie angel Guess what?  I'm still alive!

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you, Maisie. I always appreciate suggestions for improvement in my work, and yes, taking out the 'but' is much better. Richard LP
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Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
The angels you mention watch over us, but there are also human angels here on earth watching too. I love your poem, it's a real tribute to your daughter, beautiful. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Richard L. Prov... on
Thank you Jenny and Nathan--who encouraged me to develop my original poem further. Your comments are encouraging. Richard LP
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