Breaking the Ice
By Silver Spun Sand
Mon, 06 Dec 2010
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Share a smoke, strolling home
from Camden Lock; watching TVs
and rooms spring to life – lights
going on in other peoples' houses.
It is milder tonight – the thaw,
slowly setting in. Crossing a bridge,
the railway track snakes silver
in the moonshine; far below
we hear the lines sing...
Our train, just pulling in
to the station – we run, full tilt,
like a pair of school-kids; breathless...
can almost smell the melt.
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Hi Tina, what a beautiful
Permalink Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Tina,
what a beautiful sight you portray in this poem,
love the lines:- Crossing a bridge,
the railway track snakes silver
in the moonshine; far below
we hear the lines sing...
I really get the picture.
Thankyou so much for the read.
Jenny.
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So atmospheric, portrays a
So atmospheric, portrays a vivid picture so beautifully.
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I agree, you're a great
I agree, you're a great artist with words Tina. A very beautiful poem.
Beeme xx
k.
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it WAS milder, briefly. Now
Permalink Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
it WAS milder, briefly. Now it's crap again. I liked the poem though Tina!
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new Silver-Spun-Sand Really
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Silver-Spun-Sand
Really picturesque poem,
well desevered cherry!
Korker agin.
Freezing ou just got in.
julie xx
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new Tina,thank's and
Permalink Submitted by Cavalcader on
new Tina,thank's and you.
Busy trying knit ducks,saw it
in a book,I bought for a special
fund.Not good,at 2" coming out shell,
so gone onto Father Christams knot quicker.
From books have,many patterns.
Keep warm going charity Carol singing to-morrow,
love it.Can;t get used to radiators warming up noises.
julie xx
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Stunning, as always, dear
Permalink Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Stunning, as always, dear Tina ;) I've only ever been to Camden lock once - but it is indeed a magical place! Love the compactness and fluidity of this one!
Magic xxx
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Love the way you write. I
Love the way you write. I particularly like the last line. I've got a `thing' about last lines....
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I am obsessed with last
I am obsessed with last lines and agree with both of you. This is very good Tina. Congrats on cherries.
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Hi Tina, only just got round
Hi Tina, only just got round to reading this. What I really like about this poem, apart from the imagery which I love, and the sentiment (goodbye to the cold) is the fact that it is without metaphores, which proves good poetry can be written without the writer's constant penchant for likening something to something else.
Well done, nice cherrypicking!
sue
TVR
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