I hate my small town.

By Aspiringwtr

Mon, 04 Feb 2019
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i hate my small town.

it is filled with ghosts.

ghosts of people who smiled
and stabbed

ghosts of people who lied
and held me as i cried

ghosts of people who loved me once
but have now forgotten how

ghosts of people I loved
who died

i hate my small town.

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Submitted by london_calling79 on

I enjoyed the juxtapositions here. Skillfully worded. Really gives a flavour of the hypocrisy of these types of places. Welcome!

 

Submitted by Aspiringwtr on

I'm just now starting to share my writings and it really means a lot that my first comment is a positive one. I really appreciate it.

Aspiringwtr

Submitted by london_calling79 on

Keep going. You've got talent. Read all you can on here and comment on as much as you feel able to. People will reciprocate.

 

Submitted by Jane Hyphen on

You've illustrated the claustrophic effect of too many years in a small place. Funny how it doesn't seem to bother some people but for freedom seeking people like me and clearly you too it's stifling. Skilfully worded as london said.

 

Submitted by Aspiringwtr on

That's exactly how I felt writing it. I'm so glad you were able to catch my emotion from it.

Aspiringwtr